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llivla ([personal profile] llivla) wrote2007-10-05 12:36 am
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[Fic] Naruto: Naruto/Sakura: Popular Mechanics Cont'd

More NarutoxSakura stuff. :D I don't care how unpopular it is compared to the other ships--it's darned good for the soul...and I wrote a fic where I killed Naruto and now I'm angsting/emo about it. (HOW, HOW?! IT WILL NEVER HAPPEN! NEVARR! ...who could kill Naruto? That handsome goofy face?!) ....


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Worth It



When Naruto was fifteen he realized loving Sakura-chan was like trying to spell pieces of Shikamaru’s vocabulary: it takes a damn long time, but you feel really, really, really damned good at the end, and after that it’s with you forever.




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Safe


Sakura hears from Ino that when someone loves you, the way they say your name is different. Naruto says her name different, like it’s as holy as his ramen—the moron.

And she smiles because she knows her name is safe in his mouth.




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Enduring



When Sakura got arthritis, she couldn’t bend over and paint her toenails anymore. So Naruto did it for her all the time, even when his hands got arthritis too.


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*The last one was from an e-mail I got recently. I read it and though, "oh my gosh, that's...that's Naruto and Sakura!"

[identity profile] llivla.livejournal.com 2007-10-05 02:40 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh yeah you have a point. ...In that case do you think it sounds better in present or past tense? *is very nit picky*


I am not completely original, I said somewhere else I (creepyily?) see Naruto and Sakura as someone's parents, and well...I look at mine. My mom and stepdad really have what it takes and I take stuff from them. :D

[identity profile] transient-words.livejournal.com 2007-10-05 07:56 pm (UTC)(link)
You don't really have to ask me, though my personal preference leans towards past tense -- that always works well for prose.

It's nice that you use RL as an inspiration -- trust me, I do too. There's that saying that you should write what you know, though in a very light way. I just tend to pour a lot of emotion in my work and whatever I feel mostly seeps into my work. It's scary, if you think about it. And you're not unoriginal: I like your approach on Naruto/Sakura because it's subtle and, yes, very real. You shouldn't worry about that. Besides, it's not like I'm not very original either.