ext_108640 ([identity profile] transient-words.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] llivla 2007-10-05 12:49 pm (UTC)

God, why is that you always manage to write so little and yet make it so very powerful? I don't know; this really impresses me because it's hard to write, contrary to popular belief, to write short fics.

Reading this put a smile on my face because those drabbles were a slice of life: cute, heart-warming and believable. The arthritis was kind of touching -- it is just like Naruto to do anything for Sakura. The first part was adorable and the second beautiful (I love how used you the word ramen here... both ramen and Sakura are important to Naruto). I'll admit it, that in spite of my angsty writing, I'm do love fluff provided it's well done. And this was very well done with the fluff being realistic and so very "down-to-earth".

A little nitpick, though -- in both the first and second part you started off with the past tense, only to use the present later on. I'd suggest you to remain consistent.

However, this was really lovely and you reminded me once again why I'm so attracted to NaruSaku in the first place.


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